Author's Note 3/09/09

After writing my rough draft I feel that my paper has a lot of room for improvement. I feel that I need to incorporate all of my sources together more cohesively through transitions, as well as not focus on just giving descriptions. I think that I need to give more rhetorical analysis to my essay and explain how it relates to my community. I did not focus on these so much aspects so much so far, but I still need to add at least two more pages to my essay so this will definitely give me something to add and focus on. Overall I think that my paper is coming along OK considering it is just the rough draft, but I definitely have a lot to improve!