After reading the feedback that I received from the workshop, I realized that I had a lot of good information but I needed to structure it better. I felt that after my first draft I needed to find a little more direction with my paper, and after editing it according to the feedback that I got I think it is a little better. I think that my paper's organization is a little better, and that I am focusing on the purpose of the Rec Center a little bit more. I still think I need to find a way to bring in more analysis, but I feel that I have made significant improvements from the first draft.
After editing it, I think that my main concern now is going to be how I bring everything to a conclusion. My paper still needs a little bit more analysis, but because the Rec Center is such a complicated place I am deciding to just focus on the aspects that I have mentioned so far. I think that the weight room, basketball courts, games, and intramurals are key elements to understanding the audience of the Rec Center and they should be the focus. Hopefully I will be able to bring the paper together and make it work without much trouble..
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